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Up and Down

by Samaya, Year 8

Pine trees tower over me

and through the branches

small pockets of sunlight


like a waterfall

down to my level,

on the pine needle path.

A falcon soars up into the vast sky

and at a far distance

a black beetle crawls

down the bark of a tree.

What we noticed:

This poem is all about taking notice! It is the interesting details that the poet alerts us to that give this poem its power - the pockets of sunlight, the black beetle at a far distance. We also loved the verb choices ( we are verbophiles at Write On) tower, cascade, soars, crawls.

© Samaya and Write On, 2020


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